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xenithChapter 1 is a few sentences longer and 23 words shorter.
Nice. I wasn't expecting to be able to trim much from this chapter, it's been pretty well worked over.
Noted however, it's a bit long (that's easy to fix) but nothing interesting happens. Or is that just because I could probably give you a paragraph by paragraph account of this chapter without looking at it?
It does introduce (almost) all of the key players and the goals of the main characters.
Nice. I wasn't expecting to be able to trim much from this chapter, it's been pretty well worked over.
Noted however, it's a bit long (that's easy to fix) but nothing interesting happens. Or is that just because I could probably give you a paragraph by paragraph account of this chapter without looking at it?
It does introduce (almost) all of the key players and the goals of the main characters.
