Half a step forward...
Feb. 17th, 2007 02:52 pmNext scene doesn't yet exist and I'm not sure what happens. I know what the result has to. Our mystery rider gets shot, and the main character discovers who he is and has to protect him from the g/o/o/d/ bad guys.
I think it's too early for that.
Stakes aren't high enough. We don't care about him, or whether he's in danger yet. I think he needs to take more of a role in the story, which he does later. The agents need a better motive to start shooting at him too.
So I push this bit back and bring forward the murder bits.
This is going to have changes the ripple right through and means changes to everything, I know :\
I think it's too early for that.
Stakes aren't high enough. We don't care about him, or whether he's in danger yet. I think he needs to take more of a role in the story, which he does later. The agents need a better motive to start shooting at him too.
So I push this bit back and bring forward the murder bits.
This is going to have changes the ripple right through and means changes to everything, I know :\
